Comments : Embark

  • 11 years ago

    by Britt

    I really liked how in the first two stanzas, the last lines, you had an internal rhyme. I don't think that was intentional, but it really held a good feeling to the tone and flow, and made it a really good read.

    You took a topic that is written about so often and typically cliche, but you were able to mold it into a way that makes it creative, unique, and your own. This was a really intriguing write that definitely has me thinking!

    • 11 years ago

      by onethuscome

      Thank you for your kind words.I hope it is taken in such a way that you get a sense of your own enthusiasm;wherever you feel the leaping point into new life is for you cause that's what I was feeling.to celebrate adventure as the ONLY place to get a real sense of yourself.for me that is,finally,the address of the poet;to that place where you feel your own power,your own potential and doing your darndest to stay true to it

  • 11 years ago

    by Hellon

    Very inspirational write and I so wish I'd seen in while it was still eligible for the weekly contest.

    My take on this is you challenging yourself to do new things and finding out just how exciting it can be when you take yourself out of your comfort zone.

    We are only as small or as tall as we see ourselves after all.....love the message and the flow was spot on too!