The First Smile

by Sincuna   Jul 1, 2013


Out of a bundle of firsts, the elementary, comes the discussion
of love. And everyone, the self proclaimed romantics,
keeps talking about the first kiss; how daring it was
to rappel down one's lips, drifting between the slippery caves beneath.
The haunting. The majestic. Yet no one talks about
the first smile. The epitome of attraction. The marathon
that could make the heart run for miles on end.
The underrated.

Two strangers wake up, unfamiliar of the day ahead, then
rides the train one sunny afternoon. This is usually how it starts:
you bump into each other's eyes, you look away
and look back, and both of you smile.
Caught into the web of temporary desire,
nervous palm locking the books in hand
about the philosophy of Sartre. 'This is it,' your heart says,
'embrace the moment, ask for the name'. But what usually
happens is that one turns around and continues to walk.
No talk, no exchange of pleasantries, no non-fictional fantasies.
The smile becomes disposed into one's memory;
a left over dream, a story for insomniacs.

And that is why the first smile never bothers
sneaking into the discussion. You have loved more than once,
and you've been hurt, suffered, probably a couple more times.
So that smile, that same first smile, if it could speak, would ask
to be hidden inside the shadow of your rough stained lips.

# 28/06/13

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  • 7 years ago

    by mossgirl19

    Simply amazing work.

  • 9 years ago

    by gumshuda

    Oh hh woowww :o
    Oh wow o.O

    Ohhhhhhhhh wooooooowwwwwwwww :D

    This is excellent..beautiful...awesome...fantastic...
    Its perfect :)

  • 11 years ago

    by L

    Judging comment for weekly contest: July 8, 2013

    What I liked about this poem is the short journey undertaken by the narrator and the analyzation of how the majority talk about the first kiss but not about the first smile that made them fall in "love"/ being attracted for the first time. Is it because the first smile is hard to remember just because they actually didn't had the courage to speak to each other? Or because along the years that smile gets erased by suffering and getting hurt? or because that smile is better to just keep in our memories as a secret that no one but only ourselves should remember? or because that smile is actually less valuable than the first kiss? Or I can go on... but I think those who have actually love once can remember that first smile from their love one and that they talk about it more than the first kiss, because that one smile was what made them fall in love, and that love made them take the courage to speak to each other. However, those who didn't take the courage . . .

    Thought-provoking, I like the vivid images and the awkwardness that I felt from those two strangers and also the romantic scenario. Well done

  • 11 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    [Judging comment from week of 7/08/13]:

    Such an artistic piece, it's like looking beyond what we usually think about, the first kiss, first date, first "I love you". The opening was honest I felt, like opening up to the first chapter of a book and being told by the author straight out that this is not your typical love story. It's not the sensual kiss or anything. It's what reality may call not quite special yet it's still searched for with people who want to look deeper. A smile can easily be taken for granted. Yet one smile is powerful and can hold curiosity as well as interest for something more. I enjoyed the idea of the whole two strangers seeing each other on a train! I believe in fate and this meet is definitely deep, it is not just a glance shared, it provokes remembrance and is that little bit of a dream left unfinished and untouched.

    "You have loved more than once,
    and you've been hurt, suffered, probably a couple more times.
    So that smile, that same first smile, if it could speak, would ask
    to be hidden inside the shadow of your rough stained lips."

    - Such a perspective here you bring out.... that in a way the smile prefers to be underrated because someday it forms who we are. Very intriguing, still thinking about these lines!

    Beautiful verse, flowed straight from the soul and I love the way in which you write so your voice has that grace and meaning!

  • 11 years ago

    by L

    Congrats on the win!!

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