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At the end of this read I was left with a smile :)
It gives such a warm feel to the heart and the
rhymes you used also were not forced but nicely
weaved into this poem..a lovely read!

I seriously enjoyed this, even though the words serious and enjoy sort of cancel each other out. This is quite a short poem but it doesn't feel compressed and forced, more a 'image' of something longer and 'epic'. I love the tranquility created by 'passing clouds' and 'floating' or shifting to another state of mind.

That second stanza almost sounds timeless, as if people had been narrating this over and over throughout history. Of course, forgiving 'those who are bad' is a confusing concept at first sight; the word 'nothing' shows how the speaker is becoming enraged by this situation but can only 'ponder' on hypothesis.

By the final stanza, I find it hard to belief that this poem is only a few lines long. There's something so poignant about the words, syntax and overall form that makes it seem several stanzas long and, of course, this spells out the amount of talent found in this write. It just felt good, like a good book, one where the words on the page seem naturally placed alongside one another.

Superb

You painted a relaxing moment under a tree and laying on the grass while thinking and pondering about life as those clouds moved in the sky.

Good one