Comments : I Gave You My Heart

  • 11 years ago

    by ThebutterfliesMuse

    I didnt see any flaws so heres my stanza comment :).

    First- I love how you start out this poem because you are talking about friendship anf finding the write words to say to the one we love. That is one of the most difficult things to do. We always ask ourselves will they love us back? Should I take a chance or not. Great set up and stanza.

    Second- again its hard to keep feelings at bay when you feel like they dont love you back. I love how you decribe pushing the feelings away even though you loved them from the start. Great wording here.

    Third- wow this has such power and vivid imagery its unbelievable. It gets harder in time when you love someone but feelings will arise. I love how you describe and angel the sun is the halo and her eyes are the star beautiful work.

    Ending-I love the story behind this because you finally let go of your feelings inside and you used the title perfectly. I love how you keep the reader guessing not know how the other person feels. Great write other all. It connects so well together. 5