Learning to Dance in the Rain

by Daylight Lucidity   Jul 3, 2013


These thoughts that prance around my desolate mind
Try to breathe life into the wilted flowers and dry river,
Whispering pleasant words into their bodies,
And kissing them to life.

My once silent, chained, walled, heart pumps quickly
As my stomach lurches with every touch
As your arms wind tightly around my waist,
While the rain falls steadily around us.

We spin in a circle, drenched but smiling so softly,
Your cheeks harboring a gentle rose hue
As your eyes gleam into my own,
And that is when I know I will always love you.

We twirl the water from upon our arms,
I reach up and softly rest my lips on yours
Wrapping my arms around your neck
As we keep spinning within the downpour.

A delicate embrace sweetened by majestic
Billows of wind throwing away the rain drops.
You rest your hand over my heart, a smile playing at the edges
Of your lips; a sight prettier than anyone can imagine.

We stall our rotating, as we do the sun begins to shine,
Your fingers along my cheek making me breathless,
Love filling the small space between us,
Beaming like the newly surfaced golden rays of light.

We were entranced by such tender love
And the beauty of
Learning to dance in the rain.

*challenge by JamesTheShadow, consisting of the title "Learning to dance in the rain" and the words imagine and majestic*

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  • 11 years ago

    by ThebutterfliesMuse

    This poem is fantastic. Heres the breakdown.

    1 and 2 stanzas- I love how you started out this poem as you used desolate and came back with the eilted flower and dry river lines because it has a super sad feeling. Then you come back with the kiss of life. Outstanding. Then I love the decribing worda you used in the second stanza for your onced depressed heart. I love the use of once as past tense meaning you are breaking free with the feel of your loved one.

    3 and 4 stanzas- wow the third stanza has souch beautiful imahery. I love the use of hue for the cheeks and even in the rain being close makes the smole. Great wording there. You decribrd the eyes so so well and and they are portals in the soul whrre love lies.I love how you dance in the foutth stanza as it it is the poem and it really pops :).

    5/6/ end- the imagery is so beautiful and you describe the scene and dance so well. You can feel the love snd uou give your heart to this person. I love ittt so much!!!
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