Sorrow

This is another me speaking. I like the poem starting from the title "sorrow"........... But I should discourage you in line 3, 4 and 10. Buying a knife to end your goddamed world is not a way out of sorrow. A pause! Do you know how sorrowful the place you want to end this one and go is? What you have to do is rather that you fear in line 10; "going another round". This will help you to see your tomorrow, which at line2 is out of sight. Nice job anyway!

Good rhyming and nice arrangment of words its pure. i like it

Hi...=)

'As i drown my self in sorrow,
I can't see any tomorrow.'
--that line is familiar to me...i dont know...

'god dam'
--maybe it should be "goddamn"...

"As sorrow rains down on me,
It seems I can never truly be me."

--youre so deep beyond those words....
if someone just gonna read it....fine..they just will..but if you read it over and over again..no words can ever describe how much you feel...you may just have a blunt affect but the feeling inside is so heavy...

"As I see the rain descend,
I can never go around another bend."

--afraid of risking???you should not be..how will you know your capacity if you dont try...

"dont expect life to be fair"
(i just it from a few readings..)

Godbless..=)