Comments : Inside my dream

  • 11 years ago

    by ThebutterfliesMuse

    I like the english feel to this poem as it talks about love. When you are in love it really does feel like two hearts are truly one.

    The only problem I have with it is the first two lines dont rhyme and it doesn't really flow with the rest of the poem. :). Just a small flaw. Other this poem is very romantic and the feel of love is great. 5

    • 11 years ago

      by Xandra

      Thank you for the comment. (:

      I used to have trouble with rhyming when I was little. I remember writing a poem where I used "grass" and "happy" as rhyming words... The teacher didn't agree with me there though.

      I'll keep working on the rhyme and flow of my poems! (:

  • 11 years ago

    by BlueJay

    I love this piece. Its going in my favorites and I'm giving it a nomination for the contest. other than the first stanza not rhyming it is perfect. And other than that I have nothing negative to say either.

    5/5