This is very well written. In a piece like this, it's easy to let emotions take over and become sloppy with your writing. But you did not. This poem flowed very nicely. It left you wanting to know more.
"Tears escaped their prison" <--- That is my favorite line. It's a unique way of describing it, much better than just saying "I cried".
Excellent poem. 5/5
~Shades of Gray

A moving story !

W0w its really t0uching! Great imaginati0n power..
5 for it

Other than the length this piece is pretty good. The story is conveyed well and nicely crafted. Your techniques were pretty nice, the wording wasn't too simple but overpowering either. nice job

I didn't even realize this was a collaboration until I've read the last line, you guys wrote it quite seamlessly, I couldn't tell who's who! Kudos to you for that - it's quite hard being able to write like that.

That being said, another poem that I feel like deserves more recogniztion from the community - it's an extremely beautiful picturesque tale of despair, you blended togther old-style poetry with new, and captured an incredible amount of emotion in each stanza that kept me invested in the poem. I still think as a poet, you should use more punctuation so the readers know how to read it (and it'll help with the flow) and it'll make this incredibily written poem, even better.

"As a child i saw the world as it truly seemed to be
No innocence to hide behind
Yet that's what the heart craved"

That part struck a chord with me - I've always felt that I was a bit too aware of my surroundings and how things worked since I was litte, and came to learn some harsh truths about many things that way as a child. In retrospect, I wish I could go back and still maintain some sense of innocence for a longer time..

Overall: Another well-written poem by two incredible talented poems! Like Ive probably mentioned in every comment, just work on the punctuation, it matters a lot more than you think :p