Wow, fantastic poem. A smile grew upon my face as I read this. Very nice wording.

The emotion in this piece is evident, and the heartfelt wording and anxiety and fear in the lines is evident as well...you know that I've been through self harm, and came out the other side, that it's always a struggle but there are better days and there is a time it shall pass, while you won't forget, you'll find that you don't need to feel that pain to get through the tough times.

I just felt this piece was powerful and strong, and the flow was so smooth, the rhymes were subtle and weren't forced into the piece.

Really sad and emotional write

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I agree with Mark, this rhyming is outstanding and does not disappoint at all. This seems to be about a women or girl who suffers from insomnia and the illusions of the mind are playing tricks on her. The night time is the worst for her because her thoughts are wild and crazy and that in turn makes her not be able to sleep at all. The weather could also play a huge role into the mood as well, because using glass on the lawn is like rain, as in cutting of the wrists affects your mood just like the weather in this poem does, and the illusion that you are getting better overall. You believe that this day will be different but when you wake up or don't as is this case, you realize that its just going to be the same as yesterday. I love the metaphors as well. They are not over done and easily understandable. Well done.

I completely relate to this, 5/5.

This is excellent and I agree with all of the comments.

(what a kop out I am!!)

This poems different. It reminds me (as a self harmer, not as a direct link fro mthe poem) Someone who struggles at night (like i do)
I tend to struggle Very badly at night wanting to harm. This could be anyone with any sort of emotional problem at night aand as the morning comes it gets better.

This poem is sad to me because it feels as there is no hope in the poem for thins to change. Like it was just acceped that this is what is the norm

The imagery and use of alliteration is superb in this.
Wonderful poem, crystal.