Bad Habit

This is an interesting topic to write about, and it is presented in an interesting way with the structure and punctuation. The flow/tone is somewhat choppy which is a good thing because it helps mirror the bad habits you describe: picking at your hair, rubbing your skin, etc. I think the second stanza is a little too much of a tonuge twister and that the onamatopeia may be overdone with all the o's, and I can't really picture the smoke on the toothbrush (I find it hard to picture somebody blowing smoke onto a toothbrush, which is what I read it as initally before realising the description was intended slightly differently but the image kinda stuck in my head after that anyway!)

I do like how the little things you describe are not perhaps the just the habits but symptoms of something else: they are an indication into the writers mindset or character that they possibly look for distraction or fidget to hide bigger, less visible issues such as insecurity. All in all I have to be honest and say I don't think it's your best, but then again your best is amongst THE best so the poem is still good. I get the feeling it was written quite quickly but the bones of a good poem are there. I would probably revise the second stanza if I were in your shoes, but the opening and closing stanzas are quite strong. Its nice to be back catch up on (and being intrigued by) your poems again!

This person is everything that's wrong with you. Another bad habit you've picked up, but I've noticed these are your normal bad habits, but more personal and specific to your skin/beauty/looks. I definitely think that is obviously done for a reason, and I'm still thinking on that reason. lol

I love the alliteration and the almost-tongue-twister vibe of this poem. That's what made me nominate it, that it could have those devices and yet still flow off the tongue so well. Lovely!