From Crystal Tears To Buried Ashes

by Baby Rainbow   Jul 21, 2013


I wish I had the poetic words to express
the heart-wrenching pain which is rumbling
through my body. Tears are weeping from every
bone and disappointment is clutching at my lungs;
it's becoming so hard to breath.

I wish I had the poetic wisdom to describe my
mistake of where I placed my safety guard.
I wore it high above my heart so it could
come crashing down like lighting,
when storms approached.
But I should have known to have
kept it locked around my heart,
set in place like stone,
never to be penetrated.

And I wish I had some poetic power which
could turn my pain into words and
set them alight on this very page.
Burning every letter of let-me-downs
until my tears no longer wept.
Watch every single crystal of pain
turn to ashes before my eyes,
as they all float down until they are trampled on
and buried beneath the ground.

Saffie
22

21/7/13

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  • 11 years ago

    by Redangelwings

    First- I love the wording you use throughout the whole poem. You make us feel your sadness which in my opinion is a great thing though. I can feel the heartbreak you are feeling inside as I have been there. The weeping tears on every bone is a great line! Wow! Iknow ppeople can cry on the inside because they have emotional scars they feel. Your heart can truly weep too as it cries out in pain. And it's hard for you to breathe means you could be having a panic attack. I love all the descriptions yiu use!

    Second- when you build up your walls so high its hard when they come crashing down. Love is a fickle thing. Storms I love how you portray them as emotions. Lightning is terrible and the worse of storms. When you hurt you have to be protected. You feel like you have no hero at all and you feel so lost. I also love the storm line as I think rain could be the tears that flow from Your eyes or heart. You don't want anything to get inside your heart.

    Ending- the ending has a tint of hope that you want to work on. Sometimes you truly have to write your feelings out. You want to burn all your feelings away and turn the into something amazing and you truly did that with this piece. The wording and flow are amazing. I love the free verse style. And you did a great job with it. This poem is powerful in the message as I said we all need to get our feelings out. 5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by Wafaa

    I love how you made us unconsciously feel your sadness and depression despite making us believe you were unable to express them through your poems.. Such a beautiful piece !! Much love x

  • 11 years ago

    by Wild Flower

    This is a great poem Saffie.
    Even when you didnt have the words to express your emotions you conveyed them by this piece.
    Oooh ya, isn't this poetic wisdom? :)
    Well I think it is..

    Hope all is good with you. !!

  • 11 years ago

    by Amreen

    Wow... This is indeed a poetic way to express one's pain and sadness. I couldnt say more than the fact that your poem is filled with the best words and the best of emotions....

    Amazing!!!

    Keep writing:))