There are a lot of people that used to be (and some may still be around) here who understand exactly whatyou are saying here. And even tthough the length was skightly bothersome I understand with pieces so personal that may be the case (in fact I think I am often guilty of the same)

Anyway, this piece is really pretty good. There is a lot of skill here, though I think there areca few points where your words could have had more power or felt like you were holding emotion back.HHonestly, my vote is with poetry don't hold back, you are writing for a reason and that one reason is all that matters.

Your style is decent but your flow gets a bit choppy towards the later half of the piece.

Good piece.