Comments : Wither.

  • 11 years ago

    by Britt

    Such a tiny little piece jam-packed with SO much emotion.. I absolutely love this but at the same time, hate knowing that the content is probably truth.

    Keep your head up, He will provide the ultimate justice. :)

  • 11 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    Justice doesn't give closure, there is no closure but you can find peace, however tough it might be and how hard the struggle, I have complete faith that you'll make it through fine...you will because you are strong.
    Life is tiring especially when we have been taught to breathe harder and faster, when we have to give our all just to stay alive...

    Constantly thinking of you, and I know its hard babe, you know I do, but I also know, and trust me on this...it gets easier and there is an end that is positive...

    x

  • 11 years ago

    by WintersAngel

    Indeed. Tons of emotion here.

  • 9 years ago

    by Beautiful Soul

    As everyone else has said, this poem is powerful in the three lines you have written here, I saw no technical errors here at all, so to me that part of it it flawless. I love here how you break it up into two sentences, that to me makes the poem more of an impact to the reader, it's a pause and it gives the reader time to think about what they have just read.

    Going from the first and second line, you make the readers mind go crazy because you could be talking about a ton of things here, and to tie it altogether, it seems like a very personal poem. The title does the poem justice and holds so much power with the poem itself. Judging by the poem itself, it seems like you or the main character is "withering away" by something that as happened to you in the past.

    Again with the first two lines that to me is depression, and sadness because you won't see action for someone that has hurt you. But then the last line makes the depression/ withering seem real. Life seems to tire us all though, so you have real connection to anyone who has felt like this, anyway, this poem was great, 5/5

  • 9 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Such power and emotion conveyed in so few words. Excellent. Another very talented piece of writing from you. "living tires me".