The Phone Call

by Baby Rainbow   Jul 26, 2013


A touch of truth trickles down her cheek,
landing softly upon her trembling lips.

She breaks down, both inside and out,
collapsing to the ground like a demolished building.

The phone call is still ringing loudly in her ears;
a sound she will hear
forever more.

Embracing herself in a hug of denial
she curls up into a foetus,
becoming vulnerable
to a world she no longer knows.

Saffie
22

26/7/13

*prompt challenge using:
The phone call
she breaks
a touch of truth

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  • 10 years ago

    by Jenavia L G

    Last year my first love died.
    To get phone call like that is painful.

  • 11 years ago

    by ThebutterfliesMuse

    I love this so very much as well. Its so sad and makes me wonder. Woah the first two lines lol. A touch of truth trickles down her cheek wow. Sadly that is reality for a lot of people who get sad phone calls. I love the imagery you portray as she falls to the ground in complete grief over something the reader does not know. I love the complete downfall of this person from the phone call to the shock of loss. You have every detail down to a tee. I love how you leave it vague as well never knowinh what really happened. 5 bravo

  • 11 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    I love the vagueness of this because while it doesn't hold many details, you immediately get a sense that something bad happened, it made me think straight away of the death of a loved one, a boyfriend, husband...best friend...it had that connection with a disconnection, like it wasn't a family member but someone she loved on a different level.

    The tone was sad but the imagery was deep and easy to connect to.

    Love the way you used these prompts...

    x

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