Kuebiko...one springtime

Came back to the site after years of being away and I just had to come and find this poem/story, so I have just been through every one again and oh how I would love for this to be a children's book, or tv cartoon etc. It reminds me of what we have here called Me to You Bear, also known as Tatty Teddy, and I just love the innocence of the scarecrow, and that special flashback to the magic of childhood and magic, and believing teddy bears are real. It just brings so much magic , I will forever remember this poem, and forever look out for a child's book containing this in it!!

One of my all time favourite poems ever <3

Couldn't quite put a finger on it earlier but I just remembered, this reminds me so much of Toy Story. :)
I think you have one of the most wonderful relationships with your grandson. This is a great piece you've been working on, as I've told you before, and I love seeing it grow.
I love the format. I could easily picture this being read to a little kid and it brings such nice feelings. One thing that bugged me and I felt I just had to voice is the capitalization of had. I'm sure it's for emphasis and it's effective but I'm not too keen on capitalized words in poetry unless it's extremely important/creative. I'd have preferred it being italicized but since the site doesn't have that feature, it's a shame. Or maybe it's just me :)
Great poem, once again!

It's a nice descriptively penned poem, just curious though Hellon, did you get the idea of theme for the characters from 'Worzel Gummidge' ( scarecrow & aunt Sally) perhaps?

Ah. I was so excited to see this! Speechless, yet again. I swear, I had tears of joy in my eyes at the end. Sally came back! I was smiling and crying, lol. This rarely happens. :P
I love the scene you painted here, beginning of springtime. I could only just imagine how many years passed by, as Sally has grown and has a child of her own. It did make me a little sad. Gah. Mix of emotions reading these pieces!

Yay :) so happy and excited to see another one, and for it to have lots of hope and promises in it!

In the start I like how you give us the season so we know how much time has passed since the last story, and again it helps us visualize that field we have come to know.

I almost cried when you had him on the ground, I could picture them there and started to imagine what he was thinking which you then went on to introduce, maybe he thought his life was nearing the end, his time was up and he was no longer needed. Again, I thought of age and how the elderly must feel, how lonely it must be for them when family leaves them. Even if they do come to visit, the times in-between must feel so long.

Oh...how his arms ached
and he could no longer
feel his legs.

- I think this is interesting because it could be related to the fact he is aging and this is what happens, or it could be he has lay there too long and become numb through out his body. I don't think it would be the temperature since it is spring and the crops and flowers were alright. It paints such a sad picture to be lying there and not be able to move, nor feel much of your body except the bits that ache. :(

A Voice! (or was he dreaming?).

- I really like this part in brackets, because you have showed us how weary he is and so perhaps he is just hearing things.

Look mummy, over there, an
old scarecrow".

"Kuebiko?...my Kuebiko,
is it really you?"

- my first thought reading this was that someone new had moved into the farm house, and this was them just noticing him. But then when you introduce Sally again it is so touching, especially that he knows her voice so well.

I really love the ending because he doesn't finish with asking why. Or thinking why he had been abandoned. I guess at the moment we still don't know the reason, maybe it was because Sally had gone off to make a new life for herself, but has since returned? I like that it was the young girl who found him, I guess children see and appreciate things that adults sometimes become blind to.

I hope we get more answers in the next part? Like where they had been and why they left, and is he able to return to his duties etc.

Thank you for bringing this story to us, I for one love it and I love him. :)

xxx