Midnight In Heaven's Rome

The first stanza sets the scene of the dark midnight sky... the stars and moon are the only lights. I love the use of tinselled! I haven't seen it used to describe stars, but it works so beautifully because sometimes stars do look like they are stringed together.

Second stanza: You describe a paradise in the clouds, of being wrapped up in their arms and being totally in love.

Third: This part surprised me... one minute being totally in love and the next being lost because they left. But I guess that's how love works sometimes, it's there and then it's gone. So you captured that well here if that's what you were going for.

Or maybe the first two stanzas was a part of your dreams... and then you awoke to reality of him still being gone.

Fourth stanza: I like the question to them... wondering if they are aware you dream of them often...that inside these dreams your hearts connect on a level that maybe never happened so deeply in real life. You share more than you was able to before he left. Does that make sense? I think I'm reading too deep into this, lol.

Fifth stanza: As soon as they press their lips to yours, you are awoken by the screams of reality. That he isn't there, he's still gone and it's a heartbreak all over again.

Reality, you have to let go of the past and also the hope of having what will never happen.

Very heartwrenching, but I love it. Very deep, as always. <3

I thought your title was very unique and it drew me in to find out more.

I loved your opening stanza...indeed it was very dream like and set the tone for a certain romance. I wondered why you hinted at sadness throughout the verse but really...I did not expect the ending...you managed to disguise it pretty well right up to the last moment. Some very vivid imagery thoughout the whole poem and...although it was sad still, it was very enjoyable.

I love thr element of hope and love and sadness its great!.

The first stanza is so full of beauty and great imagery. When I read it I felt at peace because I looked up and saw the stars in the sky. I love how you used tinselled as it reminds me of Christmas. S o I can see the stars as silver like tinsel so I loved that connection. I love how you used the stars and moon as your light in the dark sky or you life. I like the love feel here in the second stanza. Their warm embrace means you two are in love and have each others heart! The whole feeling would take your breath away :). Excellent word choices here.

The third stanza starts the dark downfall. Its hard to letaanyone go indeed. I believe we all have been there at least once. Might I make a suggestion though?

'I became' for me does not flow with the poem. You could say I've become. Maybe thats just me though..

I love how you said tired of dreams. Anyone you still love can be very haunting though. The memories will always be there no matter what. I love the back to reality too as it shows we are all human. Dreams are nice but we can't live in that world anymore. As I said letting go is hard. I like the way you ended this though as it shows you will never be again and the past is very haunting! 5/5

Oh it feels like i'm watching a movie while reading each lines, how romantic it is when you use the heaven's Rome, THE DREAMS and the reality, the structure is very creative in itself...