Choices

by Sudo Nim   Aug 5, 2013


I'm a free spirit.

- I wine and dine alone.

Choices in life are nice;

The choices are mine alone.

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2nd edition I wrote for my life partner :
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I'm a free spirit.

This I've always known.

Many choices in life I'll make:

For reasons mine and thine alone.

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Any opinions on which is better/worse, I would greatly appreciate the feedback. I will try to return the favour.

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  • 11 years ago

    by safachan

    How should i say this , both are good and both reflects something, for example :
    " I'm a free spirit.
    I wine and dine alone.
    Choices in life are nice;
    The choices are mine alone. "
    this part here can tell me that you are a carefree person , it can be in either a positive or a negative way , it depends , but it gives off a feeling of solitude and loneliness
    *I'm a free spirit.
    This I've always known.
    Many choices in life I'll make:
    For reasons mine and thine alone.*
    in this part here it gives off a feeling of assuming your responsibilities and living with no regret ( i think) , but there are no signs of loneliness more like it a feeling of courage and determination ,
    so i guess both parts represents a state of your mind or a even a part of who you are so they both are good in my opinion
    i hope this was useful