Comments : Just Hold My Hand

  • 11 years ago

    by Amreen

    Lovely.. !
    Very touching poem and I loved the rythmic flow of it due to the rhyme. And such a sad story you shared with us. Truly touched my heart to see such true love among the two.

    Awesome:)

  • 11 years ago

    by Aveena

    This was a lovely piece, it had me on edge.

    One thing though:
    -in the second line I believe the word should be HE, it kind of disturbs the whole flow with the spelling mistake.

    "Summer's coming to an end
    HE drops onto a knee
    Will you be me future
    and choose to marry me"

  • 11 years ago

    by Robert

    I thought this was written with a good amount of time put into it. I would like to add though that your 5th stanza need's work. Typo's are in due need of help since you didn't read this over before posting haha. Nice work though.

  • 11 years ago

    by TSI25

    Devastatingly sad. its a classic story in some modern romance movies. i hope this hasnt happened to you. structurally the poem is sound and it has good flow. some of it felt a bit like slang - for instance "of this i am for sure" isnt wrong grammatically i dont think, but it feels a bit clumsy. maybe another proof reading aloud could be beneficial.

  • 11 years ago

    by HeightenedAwareness

    Beautiful..