Comments : Pardise she wants

  • 11 years ago

    by WintersAngel

    Wow. Amazing write!!! Your so descriptive, that's what makes your poems so excellent. Keep it up!!! A few grammatical errors tho:
    In the first section, second like "fills" should be feels.
    And in the last section, fifth line "they" should be there.

    All in all an amazing poem. I love it. I love your work.

    • 11 years ago

      by Rose

      Thank you !i really appreciate your comments wintersAngel