My night with rusted dented armor.

by Aubrey   Aug 8, 2013


I look at you
And a calm washes over me
My every worrie or thoughts just disappears
My body relaxes at your touches
My heart sings at the warmth and passion of your kiss
And my lips form a smile at the sight of yours
You make me believe in fariy tales
My night with rusted dented armor
You saved me from my pain
And help mend my broken and beaten soul
Forever with you I'll be
Because forever with you is where i belong .

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  • 11 years ago

    by Angel Eyes

    A nice poem, but had few grammatical errors. My suggestion to you on your future poems is to use your spell check and proof read them before you submit.

    4/5

  • 11 years ago

    by Jyoti Rawat

    Wow Lovely poem.
    And my lips form a smile at the sight of yours
    You make me believe in fariy tales

    nice lines.

  • 11 years ago

    by Aubrey

    Wow thanks :)

  • 11 years ago

    by CathyButterflyJC

    Awwwww I love this poem so much, it is so sweet and caring and full if passion and love, loveeeee it!!! I nominated it I hope that is okay :)

  • 11 years ago

    by Redangelwings

    I like this poem a lot at it shows your true love for this person. I'll help you with the spelling but its up to you to change it.

    In the third line. Worrie should be worry. Disappears should be Disappear. The fourth line touches should be touch.night should be knight.

    The second to last line could say I'll be with you forever that way it flows more nicely with the poem.

    Otherwise I like it alot like I said it truly shows how much you care for this person. The imagery is so fantastic. I can see the smile on your faces when you see each other and feel your heartbeat. 5/5

    • 11 years ago

      by Aubrey

      Thanks:) i will correct :)

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