I don't like how you didn't rhyme through out the poem but thats just a minor thing honestly. Or its a bit of a loose rhymes but it doesn't effect the poem.

I love the dark love story though as it warms my heart. I know how much you love vampires. I love the paranoid feeling you have at first. It gives the reader a chilling feeling inside. Which I love. I love the lips across your face. It gives the sense that they truly love you. Then he bites your neck and gives you what you might want. I love the bittersweet part as it shows yourapprehenive feelings. On one hand you want to feel loved and the other you don't want to leave anyone behind. The last lines are great as you finally love the vampire back. Unlocking your inner feelings. Love it! 5/5