Backyard Adventures - Terry-Tu (PartII)

Yay! Hopper :)

Next morning I arose
with the sun and crept outside
in anticipation.

- I really like the wording of this opening as we are reminded right away of the last poem and how Terry might or might not have been there the next day so we know this is what you are curious about.

He was still there!
but, had now settled
on the lowest branch
of his tree...

- I like how you used "his tree" as if he had not moved all night and had now claimed that tree as his new home.

No longer eating nuts...his head
cocked to one side
as if in thought
or, was he listening
to something I couldn't hear?
I tried to tip-toe closer
but he saw me immediately...
"Bonjour Madame
Comment allez-vous?"
he chirped

- I like how you add a bit of mystery here, as to what it is he is watching or thinking about, in a children's book I can imagine their excitement when they are desperate to find out what it is.

"Tres bien, merci" I replied
"parlez-vous Anglais?"

He stretched his purple neck,
puffed out his orange breast
and said.."�-ui...of course,
I am Terry-Tu, I speak
many languages...please
come and meet my friend
Hopper...he's moved into
the lily pond. He has
a limp (old war wound)
and a lisp. He's quite proud
of the limp but shy about
his lisp so please pretend
you don't notice".

- I like the French conversation again because it added a little bit of uniqueness to this story and poem. But I am glad he can also speak English as I don't understand French lol. The introduction to Hopper was done well and straight away you have given him a home too so this adds to the painting of scenery outside. Also builds up a strong character of this frog with your given info on him.

"Hopper...say hello to Madame".

"Hewwo"..the frog croaked.

I need some coffee! Strong and black
I thought as I nodded my head in greeting!...

- I think it might be something stronger than coffee you need? lol. Good ending, like you just could not believe your eyes and think you are still dreaming.

I enjoyed it, thanks. x x