by TSI25
Somewhat more religious than i like but thats fine. the repetition was generally pretty powerful and i think you used it to good effect. the rhyme scheme in various parts, especially the beginning and the end really helped to improve the flow of the piece as a whole. the message i took away was "respect the dead," i hope thats close to what you were going for. |
by Jim
It's a good effort ! |
by Black pearl
Wow, dude, this is a great tribute. |
by Beautiful Tragedy
Aww... I love the ryme in this, and the emotion that's it in is great. 5/5 |
by WintersAngel
Great piece. I love the rhymes, I love the rhythm. I love everything about it. |
by L
This poem was another one with great rhymes, it doesn't intoxicate me with its sounds, but rather I find it peaceful and somehow cheerful. And that's what confuses me a little bit as I see this poem is in Sad category. I mean it is sad to lose someone and miss them but I feel the life section would be more fitting. As for me, this poem tells me that we have to move on. I know we will always miss our dears ones but we also in order to move on, need to let them go. And that toast in the ending is for them and for memories. I mean saying farewell.. won't exactly be a good bye, hopefully we will meet them aside the pearly gates some ( again, hopefully ) far away day. |