Destroyed Beauty

This is such a sad topic..the innocence and trust of a child taken by someone who should know better. I like the fact that you do not go into great depth here...rather, you leave it up to the reader to form the impact of the trauma which was felt as a result.

Long had she been searching
for a dream where freedom
would find her lonely sparrow wings
and teach her how to fly.

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This stanza just spoke volumes to me...a child desperate to escape but having no where to go and no one to turn to for help...heartbreaking to say the least.

It's sad to think that someone can have so much power over a child but...sadly it happens....the only suggestion I can make to strengthen your ending is changing the word untamed to tainted for I have the feeling this is about someone being abused by a family member...just a thought I had.

Sad topic but written in a very mature way.

This is a very beautiful and sad write. Love is always ahard thing to fall for so to speak. I love how you decribe her as delicate. I think with beauty is truly is fragile. I think it comes from the inside to the out. So I can see how it would be fragile. The heart is the most misunderstood. She might be iinnocent yes but abuse or even sadness can change the quickly. We all want to feel free from the pain and hurt we feel. We can all get lost in the beautiful painted sky. The words you choose to use are great though they truly enhanced the poem.

We all get lost to the one's we love. They always seem sweet at first but in the end we get hurt for doing nothing wrong. Power is sometimes a terrible thing to have as we always use it wrong and hurt anyone in ourpath. I like the end as you leave it vague and there seems to be no hope here. You leave a little hope in the second stanza but it all seems to be crushed. I love your writing. 5.. nominated