Comments : The Real Kind of Naked

  • 11 years ago

    by Redangelwings

    This might be one of your best poems ever Brittany. I think it will touch a lot of people's hearts like it has touched mine. It truly feels like you are naked when you either fall in love for the first time or give your heart to a new person. I love the perspective ghe bring as it is pretty unique to poems. I feel like you are the person giving your heart to a new person and you feel alone waiting for the answer. I think we all are. You want to give your whole heart to this person.

    Its always so hard to change what has happened in the past. When you fall you want someone to be your hero and that's part of what love is. As you say so well you do have to give your heart and soul to get it back in teturn. I love how you paint what love really is. You did so well in the details of it and I think you nailed it for this poem. You tell a story within I feel and that is what makes poems great the mind of the reader and writer and the different view points they both bring.

    I love how you used the title as the seperating lines that works well too as you connect them with the stanzas. It does leave us feel naked. When you see your love happy you are always happy. I love how and what you did with this character as it could be any one of us. You make it show a person reading this feel connected to you ( as the writer) and fall in love. Your story poems and love poems are great.

    The ending stanza connected with the two lines is the best I feel. As you show you are fragile when you are with your love yst you two together complete each others heart. You are one soul and that is what makes us beautiful. Its not the outside but our heart. Mind and soul. When you are honest and fragile that IS beautiful as we show our weakness. You show that love is very real but it always has a weakness but when two hearts make a whole thats when you are beautiful. 5. Nominated

  • 11 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    I just love every single line of this poem! The repetition of "when you" made it personal, able to relate to, and showed how you much you care... how much you are reaching out to this reader and to anyone who hides. We all have secrets, some big, some small and to give our heart (our trust) to someone may take time. It can be frightening because that's a part of us we may try to keep safe.... It's so easy to always be the one to smile or continually say "I'm good thanks" because it can seem too much of a worry or deal to actually tell the truth, open up. But you're right, it is a beautiful thing and there are people in the world who will listen and not take advantage of that vulnerability. You just have to find the right person.

    the ending lines were perfect, truly inspiring! :]

  • 11 years ago

    by JaneDoeWrites

    I absolutely love this. Great job!!!! I really hope this makes front page.

  • 11 years ago

    by Beautiful Tragedy

    This is amazing. I honestly never would've thought of this. you are a great writer. this should win a contest.

  • 9 years ago

    by Francis Njoroge

    This is just excellent. Every word takes the reader into the poet's mind