by Redangelwings
This might be one of your best poems ever Brittany. I think it will touch a lot of people's hearts like it has touched mine. It truly feels like you are naked when you either fall in love for the first time or give your heart to a new person. I love the perspective ghe bring as it is pretty unique to poems. I feel like you are the person giving your heart to a new person and you feel alone waiting for the answer. I think we all are. You want to give your whole heart to this person. |
I just love every single line of this poem! The repetition of "when you" made it personal, able to relate to, and showed how you much you care... how much you are reaching out to this reader and to anyone who hides. We all have secrets, some big, some small and to give our heart (our trust) to someone may take time. It can be frightening because that's a part of us we may try to keep safe.... It's so easy to always be the one to smile or continually say "I'm good thanks" because it can seem too much of a worry or deal to actually tell the truth, open up. But you're right, it is a beautiful thing and there are people in the world who will listen and not take advantage of that vulnerability. You just have to find the right person. |
I absolutely love this. Great job!!!! I really hope this makes front page. |
Aww thank you :3 |
by Beautiful Tragedy
This is amazing. I honestly never would've thought of this. you are a great writer. this should win a contest. |
This is just excellent. Every word takes the reader into the poet's mind |