Depressions can be very painful. It does not go away so easily though it can be cured to a large extent. The way you have expressed yourself in these verses is amazing. Great Writing.

I like the way you use repeating patterns such as "Please let me hope" "... breathe" etc. It makes it more like a song. Its kinda difficult to make it work cause it has a tendency to make things boring but you definitely nailed it. All in all, a really good one. :)

I have been reading this piece thrice,, it is always puzzling my mind, to whom this piece is addressed, to a man or to a woman, but then i finally figure out that this belongs to a woman, whose spell is intimidating that somehow you need to be free from its casts, your struggle gives you a price of your freedom..very inspiring piece Natalie...you show in another way on how to win the game.

I have been reading this piece thrice,, it is always puzzling my mind, to whom this piece is addressed, to a man or to a woman, but then i finally figure out that this belongs to a woman, whose spell is intimidating that somehow you need to be free from its casts, your struggle gives you a price of your freedom..very inspiring piece Natalie...you show in another way on how to win the game.

Hello natalie,

yout talent is remarkable and for me a way to imagine the emotions in every word.

Your entrance is majestic - makes you feel joyous, but this is snatched away and the reader is then taken on a journey of dispare and fear of death.

I love the way you taper the ending. This gave me shivers - the shear desperation of the pleas.

Wonderful work as always. xxx