Hidden Parts Of Me

There are hidden parts of me
echoing in silence, beneath
the stormy depths of the sea.

I like how you have used sea here for we never quite know how deep it is and is therefore the perfect place to try to bury these hidden parts of you. Also liked the word stormy because it tells the reader that you are not yet calm enough about whatever it is you wish to release.

They remain trapped between
angry waves of memories,
and teasing waves of freedom.

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Using the word freedom tells me that...you have not lost hope that someday you will be able to win your struggle and finally let go.

I often begin to miss
these hidden parts of me
as I ponder over a confusing thought:

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I'm not sure about the first line here to be honest...often and begin just don't seem to site together nicely?

Can something truly be missing
before it has ever been found?

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I love the question you raise here...it has a very melancholy sound and words well mid verse.

And right now it feels like I am drowning,
and these hidden parts of me
have been murdered by illusion,
an illusion that will never set me free.

Can I make a suggestion here...I'm just not sure that murder works...

And right now it feels like I am submerged
and these hidden parts of me
have been drowned by illusion,
an illusion that will never set me free.

Just some thoughts for you to consider...once again, I enjoyed my visit to your account.

There are always hidden parts of us that dont want anyone to see at all. Memories are always toughto over come and when you talk about this I can see the past haunting you and it can be hurting no matter what. I do love how you can taste freedom here though. I understand though about sadness it always pulls you back in no matter what. Your heart is a fragile thing and when it has been hurt you put up walls.

I agree with your line. I think if we are used to something it is hard to change. We ponder what our life will be like one way or the other. We all wonder what it is like to be fully happy. I love the question you asked. Can something be found? I am unsure. I do understand. How can we find bliss if we have never felt it at all. When we truly don't have something in our lives how can we miss it. But we as humans always wonder what if our life turned out different? .

I love the ending it is so strong and powerful. The message is so strong and you feel so sad but it would seem you got your feelings out. I love how you drown in an ocean and that water can mean so much. Our minds play tricks. We all want to be set free from the illusion of sadness. I love this so much. 5/5

Nice piece! Angry waves of memory..i like the structure of this piece, the use of metaphor makes this piece cryptic and well define, i love the way you want people to tell about the tale of this piece..great job...