Oh... are you trying something different?

Can I say it's an attempt at an extended metaphor?

I think is, I really like it! Specially, the way you rhymed it. I've been trying to rhyme extended metaphor but they are so hard. Well done.

I really enjoyed this. Well done!

The rhymes kept the reading smooth and at
the same time delivered a message and I also
liked how you used a string to draw the current
situation of a relationship. It brings vivid images for the mind..another excellent read :)