by Britt
I like the grocery style list you have.. however I don't like the use of numbers here. I feel like it makes it completely... un-poetic? if that makes any sense? |
by Redangelwings
This really is a great sad poem. It blew me away from the thought provoking and well detailed. The title drew my eyes and drew me in and the poem made me stay. :). I do love the list style too because I feel it proves a point. It really is unique in this style. The numbers don't bother me as much actually because I relate lists to numbers. I feel it makes it easier to picture or it could say that those are the top reasons. There are so many more though. I love how you personalize it though. It makes the reader think about what is so simple but its true. I think my favorite lines are number 2 and 4. I think two people who are sad connect more and its true we feel like no one listens and its hard to deal with. I love the drifting away because it does feel that way at times. Number eleven sums up the poem so well. It makes you think that love is very difficult to fall for. Overall I saw no flaws. 5/5 |