I love how subtle this poem is. You unitentionally wrote about a person without writing about them. I loved the first stanza as it shows how real writing is indeed. I love the eyes here how the words jump into them. I love how you used this person's eyes as your muse and wrote about them from your heart. It shows how much you care about this person and love them. I love how your heart is in peices and this person picked you back up and you are falling more for them everyday. Its hard telling people about your pain and seeing them hurt. The past is in the past and you will learn from mistakes indeed. You will heal as love and time does that. You should never give up on you. You are stronger then you know or even think. I loved this poem as it shows how strong love is. 5/5 xx

This is a beautiful poem and it is a creative piece as well. I like the subtle rhyming and how you express your love for this individual or thing. Many times we do not acknowledge the affect that a person or thing has on our lives, but when we sit and consider what makes us happy we are able to benefit from what we love the most.

Beautiful.....AL

Like you say at the beginning of this poem...nothing is being hidden here and, really it doesn't need to be because you are just telling this person the truth in a simple way. They have helped you find a way back to happiness and while the journey is still not complete they have proven that the are in for the long haul. I think it needed to be kept honest because they may not know about metaphors etc...I really liked this one once again. Just something for you to consider..

and all this pain will be in the past.

Do you think pain is necessary in this line...you already mention it just a little above and taking it out doesn't really change the meaning...

and all this will be in the past.

Just something for you to consider...