by Beautiful Tragedy Sep 15, 2013
category :
Sadness, depression /
about depression
When I'm gone will you realize what you've done to me? |
by BlueJay
The emotion in this piece is well used and a bit overwhelming at points (not a bad thing, just brings life to your piece.) There is a little trouble with the flow in the first two stanzas, but other than that you did a pretty fair job in that realm. The word choice is a little bit weak, but it still gets your point across. All in all you wrote a very decent write. I am glad I found it. |
Thanks, appriciate the critisism too. i'll work on it:) |
by broken sword
Awesm poem |
by Crimson
This is very good, keep writing :) 5/5 |