This is very good, keep writing :) 5/5

Awesm poem

The emotion in this piece is well used and a bit overwhelming at points (not a bad thing, just brings life to your piece.) There is a little trouble with the flow in the first two stanzas, but other than that you did a pretty fair job in that realm. The word choice is a little bit weak, but it still gets your point across. All in all you wrote a very decent write. I am glad I found it.