It's in your eyes I seen a thousand times
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"I" should be changed to "I've" or "seen" to "see" and "that" could be added between "eye" and "I've" otherwise it is a good line.
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Behold it's another day
Finally Time to realize
The thing you meant to say
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"You" should be "you're" or "you are" I like that Time is a capital, it makes you feel like there is more importance than all of the other words like that person has been waiting too long to admit that persons problems
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You like the sun, you Like the rain
That's why you're in the forest of blame
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I like this last line, it's like that person does what he/she likes and how he/she likes it, and yet the consequences are piling on top. Good right- 5