Lost Rills - Kwansaba

by Lonely Rider   Sep 24, 2013


In sultry cusp of a purple dusk,
sleep sun burnt days of fading yore,
when lush meadows once adorned the land,
and lofty woods echoed with valiant roars,
now, Orion stares down through murky skies,
looking in vain for lost crystal rills,
instead finds ailing cloud over bricked hills.

Kwansaba Poetry Form - has a pattern of sevens: the poem consists of seven lines, each line contains seven words. With the exception of proper nouns and foreign terms, no word may have more than seven letters. This repetition of sevens might come from the fact that it grew out of poems written for Kwanzaa, one poem for each of the seven virtues celebrated that week.

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  • 8 years ago

    by Trish

    Amazing write, interesting new format. Your poem was visual to the mind and easy to read.

  • 10 years ago

    by Britt

    Judges comment:

    HELLO something different! I've never heard of this form before, and was so pleased to be introduced to it in such an awesome way! It's really an interesting one, the 7's and how particular it is, but I wouldn't have even noticed the words had to be less than 7 letters, she pulled it off so well. The first line absolutely had me from the get-go, I loved the soft/internal rhyme and the use of 'sultry'.. that first line had it all for me and I knew I was about to enjoy it. This poem is also so jam-packed with descriptive imagery that it's filling my senses! There is such a softness to this nature poem 'lofty woods', 'murky skies', 'lush meadows', I feel like I should be reading this in a soft whisper-like tone. A pleasant surprise, and I may try this form soon! Beautiful!!

  • 11 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    Interesting form and you have done a good job painting an interesting picture with lines of seven..well done my dear!

  • 11 years ago

    by L

    I really like visual that I get from this poem. Well done

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