I think this is a decent effort for a first poem. The rhyme isnt great at the beginning or end but works quite well in the middle of the poem. Remember poems dont have to rhyme so dont force it and try without rhyme to experiment.

Also I think there is some punctuation needed. Read the poem aloud and try to see where commas etc should go naturally.

You did achieve a nice lyrical quality at times in the poem.

Keep working at it