Comments : The caterpillar

  • 11 years ago

    by Ale

    / v \ Love it!

  • 11 years ago

    by Alanis

    This is so cute! I adore it Alice. Its short and sweet, it has a good flow, rhyming like you did requires skill and I think you accomplished it without flaw, welcome to my favorite list

  • 11 years ago

    by Redangelwings

    There are a couple of small errors here. In the second line no thin should be nothing and the last line should read how ever much I chew and chew as it would make more sense that way I feel.

    I liked this poem too it is cute and the way you decribed the caterpillar is great. I can see the simple imagery play out here. I think caterpillars are so underrated as they turn into something so beautiful. I love writing about butterflies as they br ing so much to thr table. I can see or think here that you are a caterpillar and you want to turn into a butterfly someday. I think people can be if they tried and are already butterflies. But this really is a cute people that has so much deeper meaning. 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Nina

    You know, call me crazy, but I think this poem of yours kinda sounds like one written by a.a Milne. Keep up the good work!

    • 10 years ago

      by Alice

      Life goal: ACHIEVED

  • 8 years ago

    by Em

    I like this :)