He's the demon cast out
by alex cherneski Sep 26, 2013
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He was my love |
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11 years ago
by Alanis
You did well for someone who is still getting back on their feet!! Its a well constructed, short and sweet without being around the bush, my critique is that like when you sed drug me in the dark, it seems a bit outta place I suggest something like, drowned or pursued, that's my opinion, well done
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11 years ago
Thank you :) and yea that does sound a little better, at that moment I just couldn't think of anything else. lol but thank you very much for your advice!! I really appreciate it! =))
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