Its a sad poem. It has a good flow and an outstanding aray of emotions, my only Critique would be that the ending is a bit sudden, maybe add another line before that? But that's jst my opinion. Keep writing bestie

I felt this

For starting, it's a good piece. My only critique is try to keep the poem either in present tense or in past tense where it needs to be. For instance, the first stanza starts in past tense, but then it goes to present tense.

See:

We came so close, face to face,
A tear within her eyes.
I ask her what's wrong,
But she just walks on by.

Suggestion:

We came so close, face to face,
there were tears in her eyes.
I asked her what's wrong,
but she just walked on by.

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Then on the second stanza on this line:

" I remember the the face of unhappiness"

--- I believe there was a typo. A double "the."
Other than that, I think this was good.