Regret

by Adna   Oct 3, 2013


In a sea of pain
I found my face turned upwards
As I cried and begged for an end
I said I believe and filled my heart with deceit

I spoke to shadows
Acted through the motions of normal
I dreamed of death
Oh sweet release

Oh Most Merciful, You saved me as I gave up
And protected my life blood as I bid it to bleed
Healed my heart and showed me a new start

Now I cry for my sinful past
For I dared to throw away the gift of life
Regret

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  • 11 years ago

    by Darren

    Nit out of the way first,

    stanza 2 I assume 'sweat' should be 'sweet'

    (sweat works but not in this context ..!!)

    I like the drama in this and the real feeling of angst throughout,
    Talking to shadows and motions of normal work well together and gives us a real sense of a daydream like state, where you mind is elsewhere but your body is on autopilot.

    I also like the turn in stanza three where everything seems more upbeat, but stanza four brings us back to one and two, you do not trust or allow yourself to be happy, maybe you have thrown something away that could have been good, yet you realise after it is too late.

    nice write in a short piece with some good detail.