As you have no full stops/periods I would drop the capital letters apart from the first line on each new stanza.

Im should read I'm in stanza 2.

The narration is good in this with nice flow apart from line 3 in stanza 2. I would add a comma after 'hears' Because I feel the line reads stronger emotionally with a pause just before 'cause no one cares'

These are just my thoughts,

Stanza three is very clever and I like the abruptness in four.

nice write.