by Beautiful Soul
To me this is a lot better then your other poems because it is much shorter and well spoken. I loved this because it seems like the character is speaking to the love of her life. I like that because it feels more real and intimate. The reader connects to the characters well. You can feel the love between these two. I loved each stanza here because it seems like a life story is enfolding between our very eyes. From start to finish there the feelings are very real. I love the honesty of this as well. Because at the start you say you put up with each other moods and that's very true. You define love so well and the "darker" side of it a lil. Like the fighting and the mood swings. All you can do is put up with each other. Haha. Anyway over all this is great I feel. The characters are vivid and I loved how you make the happiness flow throughout. Well done. |