by Alanis
Your views on politics is beyond compare, you are in your element with this poem, you out line it in such a way that it makes your readers believe your point of views |
by DarkLight
Thanks Alanis |
As I have suggested before, I would highly recommend separating into stanzas. They don't even have to have the same number of lines, just split your poem up so visually it is more easy to read and is not lumped all together. Take time to edit. I found this poem to be inconsistent, not with the message but with grammar. Unless you want one line to stand alone and not have punctuation, if you are ending one thought and moving on to another, to leave that line hanging, because it will confuse the reader. |