Searching for you
by Xx Grieving from the inside outxX Oct 12, 2013
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When I walked into the room I looked for you I searched and searched and never found you everyone keeps telling me your nothing but a dream a ghost but some how I love you the most you have the key to my locked heart and I don't know where to start but I know in my heart ill found you ill keep searching until there no more step in my walk until there no more breath left until my lonely heart grows cold ill search until I cannot search no more |
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11 years ago
by Baby Rainbow
I found your writing needs some grammar added, just simple commas and stops, and to break it up into more lines so it spaces it out more.
But your words themselves are actually quite powerful, the story and message is clear and strong, and quite touching.
The idea here of looking for someone, I am not sure if you know who it is yet, or if it someone you hope to find but don't know yet, either way would work well. Infact I think we all look for both at some point.
I liked your poem, and really would like to see it laid out so more people would read it as the message is one that can be related to. xx-
11 years ago
Thank you for your feed back :) ill be sure to do that I always forget to put them in I just into writing and post it after I'm done without thinking.
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11 years ago
by ted mcdaniel
I flelt the filling and it move me i love it
