Comments : Becoming Untouchable

  • 11 years ago

    by Redangelwings

    This is very sad saffie. I see you personalise this person as well. I think you are saying that through this person's eyes everyone sees them as ugly. It's sad how people see other people. We judge others without getting to know them. Strangers are dangerous when you have had a bad past. This person wants to find happiness but it's hard for her. It's sad how we don't see ourselves as other people see us. I like this poem a lot because it has a deeper mean to show how people are when we are sad. You wrote something that can be related to anyone's life. The ending is sad too. You write beautiful.

  • 11 years ago

    by Hellon

    I just want to say here...and I will come back with a proper comment on the actual poem later...(at the airport now..first time having access to the internet) I can see that you have used the third party (she) in a few of your more recent poems and I have to wonder why? I'm unsure right now if you use that to distance yourself from a personal experience or whether you are trying to portray something for an audience ...hope you understand what I mean...

    • 11 years ago

      by Baby Rainbow

      Hi Hellon, I know what you mean. I guess I do use third party when I disconnect from it, though I do not know what makes me do it since I manage sometimes, but others I do third person. I wrote about 20 poems a fortnight ago, in one night, when I needed to just get things out, so I guess this is what came out. xx