My Darkened Dreams

First- With nightmares it's hard to get through them when you have been through so much. Memorirs are always there and always get worse when there is nothing to comfort you but more darkness. You started out very strong because you put your emotionsout there early and gave the reader a lot to think about here. It makes me want to read more.

Second- I like how you say the light fades in the morning. Morning is usually a time where the sun kisses your cheek. I loved the interesting take and a sad spin on this. The past is a very terrible thing when it goes so badly. So I think it's an underrated thing when we write about it. It can be very difficult to write about so I love how you wrote it here.

Third- Even though dreams are not real they seem so sad and dark to that person. I love the word scream used here because of the impact it has. Though I can't see your dream I see it enough to know that's its a very scary thing. Also I liked the use of whispering when describing tears. I can see them flowing from your eyes silently as you try to cope from what yoi see.

Ending- The childhood is a great add in here I think. Because that tells me when it happened. I get a very sad image though because a child is supposed to be innocent and here again it's a bit twisted and dark. Theeending two lines have a lot of impact. How much more can you take? Who knows?. It tells me you have been strong for a very long time. Overall a great poem though. Strong message and emotions.

I have much admiration for you. Your poem has me beside you with our emotions and this moment.