Brown eyes blind to peace

Judging comment:

I really like this poem, I haven't had an easy time intepretating it though, however I really liked it after actually understanding it. You are feeling upset about something, you want to come to your lover's arms, but you find it hard and as you are now seeking a release so desperately to the point of attempting to let it out by screaming, you just realize that you just can't release it, not yet, and have to swallow the heaviness of such emotion. If you really are in love and want to fall into his arms, remember to follow your heart and not your fears. If the love is true, it'll be stronger than everything else, and those desperate screams will turn into graceful whispers of joy. Great job.

Wow, A Great Write, and Congrats!!!

There is a quiet strength that emits from this beautiful work

A-M-A-Z-I-N-G!! The flow and the words, emphasizing holding to something, and being held back in the end...you wrote with your heart, Meena. Congrats!!

Lost I am within a
blue world, unable to
find a path out of this maze,

--- I know the feeling, but there's a path.

Brown eyes blind to peace
whilst pain drives over it
cruising with memories
which are best forgotten,

--- I often wonder if they are best to be forgotten, I mean the memories.

Strength that once stood tall
now crumbles in tribulation
draining...
draining reasons and hope,

-- I think , I am not sure , but I think if you added another line break between tribulation and draining.. it would read easier? At least the way I read it, when I got to that part, i continued reading after tribulation. But I feel "draining might stand on its own just well.

Strength that once stood tall
now crumbles in tribulation

draining...
draining reasons and hope,

Something thunders
shattering the sills of my heart
can you hear screams my love?

-- Perhaps, capitalizing "can" would make the reader take a small pause when reading. Or adding a period after heart... Unless it was intended to be read with no stop.

Desperately seeking a release...

I want to come to you...

open those flood gates
fall into your arms
without been judged,

--- hmm... ( open those flood gates ) may be set in parenthesis. That way, the reader will know you are asking that someone. and that there's a distinction between what you want to say to that someone and to what you want to do.

EDIT: nevermind, I think a comma after "open those flood gates" will do, I think that's also part of what you want to do. .. to release everything.

But I can't...just can't,
so will simply swallow
this heaviness
and smile...

hmm.. sadness seems to be everywhere. At times, it best to just cry. It seems to help. If it doesn't, talking to someone may?

take care and congratulations on your win.