When He's Not A Stranger

by Meme   Oct 25, 2013


I used to taste the familiarity
of your voice, and the warmth
of every word that soothed
the loneliness of my winters.
Because you knew when my
heart ached; you heard the
loner that camped within me.

Remember the trembling voice
at the other end? I had to hold
my breath for a while because
you did have me at hello. I still
close my eyes for the memory
to recall the butterflies I felt
within, until reality slaps me
right back and I realize I am
not a dreamer anymore.

If only I knew that l would be
celebrating your withdrawal
from my life I would have never
taken that leap of faith, because
this is how I see it now. Liars are
those who told you that it's better
to have loved and lost than never
to have loved at all.

--
Heartaches are unfixable!
--

Here I am today still drafting my
way around the void you left, still
trying to figure out the point when
you became a stranger...

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© Copyright 2013 by: gIrL
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  • 8 years ago

    by Em

    This was really well written.
    1: This is a remarkable opening. You can feel the love you had for this person coming through and the reminiscing of how this person made you feel, how they knew exactly what to say or do to make you feel better and those kinds of people can hurt the most.

    2: I really get this.. The nerves of the first call because that voice was something you could only imagine and you try and remember things that have now gone, the initial butterflies when his name popped up on your screen and then bam the reality hits you square in the face that its not like that anymore. I have been here all too often.

    Liars are those who told you that it's better
    to have loved and lost than never
    to have loved at all.
    ^^
    Totally agree with this because sometimes it doesn't feel like it at all.

    Heartaches are unfixable!
    ^^
    This line totally got me.

    4: When somebody we love becomes a stranger we never quite know when or how it happened but always question ourselves, was it something we did etc?

    This was breath taking.
    Em

    • 8 years ago

      by Meme

      Your brought back memorirs just by commenting on this poem. Thank you :) its been a while since I read it!

  • 10 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    Judging comment:

    I really love this poem, extremely the juxtaposition between the butterflies she felt at the very beginning when they first met and the bitter reality. All of those images that you've created are extremely sweet and poetic, and the harsh meeting with the facts is something that's so unbearable for the poet that, by the end of the poem, she gives in to her sadness and lets it out magnificently. "Liars are those who told you that it's better to have loved and lost than never to have loved at all" as the poet preludes to her total melancholy, after a well thought of pause by the poet, anticipating one single strong statement, the cry of the heartbroken poet that regrets having had to go through such a heartbreak, because after all, he will never be a stranger. Good job.

  • 11 years ago

    by Prasad Baadkar

    We think, feel, understand so expect sumthing along d journey of life though surrounded by d whole world but one person who means d whole world, who truly understands n make life worth living n dying for, but, sumhw along d walks of life awl dat was so gud sumday changes oua beliefs n approach to oua thoughts n life, sum or all actions seem fake so d identity of d person we had assumed to b...:) just like wakin outta a long day dream n realizing, yeah diz is life, as it is got to b n not wat we feel as tender feelings change wen maturity brings a person face to face vid reality sumday.

    Gr8 one again.... Keep it up

  • 11 years ago

    by Abed

    I love this poem.
    Great job, Meme ;D

    • 11 years ago

      by Meme

      Thanks bro :)

  • 11 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    I used to taste the familiarity
    of your voice, and the warmth
    of every word that soothed
    the loneliness of my winters.
    Because you knew when my
    heart ached; you heard the
    loner that camped within me.

    - strong opening, it really pulls on the readers experience of love and I found myself relating to these thoughts instantly. The wording was interesting and also kept the flow at a steady pace with no flaws or sudden breaks. I guess the connection is based on what love should be and how the other half should know when their lover is hurt/sad etc. I like your choice of wording with the loner camping. I imagined this lonely person wanting love, and then finding that someone to love them which they never thought would happen.

    Remember the trembling voice
    at the other end? I had to hold
    my breath for a while because
    you did have me at hello. I still
    close my eyes for the memory
    to recall the butterflies I felt
    within, until reality slaps me
    right back and I realize I am
    not a dreamer anymore.

    - Such a strong connection in this stanza to the first, it turns around the tone and shows that the beginning is not going to have a happy ending. The word slap stands out here and shows what a shock it was to find out this love was never real. I also like your line of the butterflies when you think back of the memories. Very touching.

    If only I knew that l would be
    celebrating your withdrawal
    from my life I would have never
    taken that leap of faith, because
    this is how I see it now. Liars are
    those who told you that it's better
    to have loved and lost than never
    to have loved at all.

    - I so connected with this ending here of the above verse. It is such a powerful quote that may open up a debate because it depends on your state of mind I reckon, some will agree with it, but then when their situation changes they can completely understand the quote in reverse. The quote worked really well in your poem and to have it and the end of the stanza leaves it lingering fresh in the reader's mind. I do also like the regret at the beginning, like if you could foresee the pain this person would cause you, you would not have let them in or let yourself love them so much.

    --
    Heartaches are unfixable!
    --

    - strong powerful line, very clear standing on its own, and again it is so relatable. I like the use of the exclamation mark with this because I think it shows the anger you would feel towards this person, and also at yourself for loving this person. I think it is hard to forgive yourself for loving someone who hurts you.

    Here I am today still drafting my
    way around the void you left, still
    trying to figure out the point when
    you became a stranger...

    - I really like the ending, leaving the reader knowing where you are right now in your mind, how you still feel trapped within this situation and your heart is perhaps trapped between loving them and missing them, and also hating them.

    I related to this poem a lot, and I think you wording it very well. I can see why it won, well deserved, so well done. I really like the title choice also. I think it sums up the point of the poem, but also the hope that maybe he won't be a stranger in the future because you have not got over him yet.

    :)

    • 11 years ago

      by Meme

      Thanks Saff :*