Comments : Frozen Memories

  • 11 years ago

    by Redangelwings

    The night is always the most difficult when you are alone with your thoughts. We always want to forget the memories we hold inside. I think with scars we need to let them heal. Fear is also the worst feeling because there can be lots of fears in your life. But I like the start of this. It again pulled me in to what is your fear and save the character you write about. Omg the second stanza... you I mean the imagery is so real and it just makes me sad and weep. I know I can't truly understand what you go through but wow my heart goes out to you for sure. I like the metaphor you seem to use for the stars and life. Depression makes you feel like the night . The ending wraps up the poem well because the tone is sad. The sadness and emotional scars are leaving you cold and I like the use of monster too. This person hurt you so much that he really is a monster. Great poem overall though. :)

  • 11 years ago

    by Justanothertwit

    Numbness grows colder on my bones,
    with every memory I can't forget.
    The night seems so long when the fear
    begins to flood my mind,
    as if the past was running out of time
    to remind me of its scars.

    ^The chilling feeling of being haunted by fear or regret is so strong here. I can really relate to this right now, the way the past seems to haunt us, even when we may feel like we've overcome it. It tends to hit us when we are weak and take all that we have.

    Nothing cures the pain on my face,
    as I feel his fist striking me once again,
    like I am right back there in that moment.

    ^This stanza...the idea of this abuse, whether it's symbolic/metaphorical or straight up physical, the idea of somebody committing this type of cruelty makes my heart ache.

    The night slowly fades away with the stars
    but the sun never seems to appear.

    ^Beautiful wording here, the never ending darkness of pain is intense.

    The numbness never stops, I don't
    think it ever will. Not until I'm as
    cold as ice...

    ... as cold as the monster who
    froze my heart with fear.

    ^At first I thought you were referring to death (which idk what exactly you are referring to, obviously (: ), but then the thought of becoming the one that hurt you came to mind. The idea of making others feel the pain that you've felt and inflicting them as you've been, really stands out to me here.

    This is a beautiful, heart wrenching poem. It elicits so much emotion and it's very moving.