Death's Passionate Kiss

This poem totally blew me away Brittany :) heres my breakdown.

First stanza- I loved how you sucked me in with this stanza. The wording is very dark and deep. I loved the way you talked about suicide attempts even here. It's that hit you in the stomach moment. The question to ask here is who is they? Who didn't understand. Was it your family or was it death in general? This is also very sad because of the lover line. It seems the lover has already passed away and now this person wants to join them. Like this person's reality is not well and death is her only escape for happiness.

Second stanza- The second stanza answers the question in my mind. The family is who. The imagery here is crazy and sad. I agree that if you leave a sad person alone it is a bad mistake for sure. The gun is a very nice touch though. It heightens the tone of the poem very well and makes the readers haert stop and want to save this person. Well done for setting the tone in the first two stanza. The letting go of the gun adds more and entices the reader to keep going.

Third stanza- The fear is here . This person feels so much fear to getting found out and that is the last thing they want. This tells me the attempt is very real and she will do anything to die. I also love the knife as well because they know it well. I say this because you say she bandaged her arm in the first stanza. I love it because it os a quick way to die and that's what you were going for here with the fear of being found.

Fourth/fifth stanza- This is here the plot gets sad. I loved every line of detail here. The flow is beautiful because you show what this person does to prepare then just do it. I love the lines of blood too. It shows how much the loss of blood is there and that is flowing fast down both arms. I also like both arms because it's just quicker. The fifth stanza is great too. It shows and tells so much. I love the whisper too. It's a last breath kind of thing. You will be together with your love and in the end that's all she wanted. Any way the angel of death is also a nice touch because maybe the angel is a vision of her lover?

Sixth/end- The angel of death so to speak I love because she wants to help the person who died. The kiss is perfect as well telling me in my mind that she is the lover! The end is such a twist to the rest of the poem too. They seem to fall back in love maybe for the first time in a long time. Anyway. The poem is just perfect. You wrote this sp well and kept me capitivated the whole time :) well done!!!