Let My Hair Down

by Forever Hers   Oct 29, 2013


Walls built high block out everyone
With good and bad intentions
Except for one who shines brighter than the sun
And who climbs their height farther than
Anyone who's ever tried.

As we stand face to face,
I am still reserved until her hand
Gently reaches out to grasp mine;
Her fingers lacing with mine, the feel of its warmth
Soothing the ice encasing my heart
And melting into an endless river of love.

She brushes a lock of hair away from my
\Vulnerable eyes, allowing the hidden need for her
To rise to the surface; her own eyes soften
As she senses all the stress and pain
Lurking in my mind, leaking to twine with each
Strand of hair, neatly kept together by an elastic band.

She whispers her words, ones that soothe
My tired soul into secure comfort;
She reassures me that it'll be okay and that she is always there,
And with that, I do something I've never done; I slowly
Let my hair down, releasing me of my shadowed hurt.

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  • 10 years ago

    by Burning Angel

    I love this poem!

  • 11 years ago

    by Lofallenve

    I have to be in complete agreeance with Red angel wings. This is a beautiful poem :) 5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by HOLLYBXBE

    This is amazing! It's been awhile since I've felt this. I wish my relationship would go back to the happy days :(

  • 11 years ago

    by Redangelwings

    Okay this is another GREAT poem Brittany. :). Here's my break down again.

    First stanza- I totally understand why you would build up walls in life. It seems here you are saying that you have been hurt and guard your heart. Which again I understand well. Anyway. I know it is very difficult to let anyone in. This is a very good start though. Kate has climbed those walls and you let her in. Which must have been very hard. I loved the wording though. Hmm. This person shines like the sun and that is such a beautiful line. They seem to be your angel and true love. Like the halos light heals your heart.

    Second- I love the lines here. Of course like I said when you have been hurt you are always reserved. But I love the holding of hands though. It is such an underrated thing in love. It is such a simple thing but such a heart fluttering thing to do. I also love the word gently. It works well here because you say you are fragile and she gently places her hand in yours. That means she is slowly putting the peices back together of your heart. Again I love the ice encasing your heart and she melts it. Xx.

    Third- The eyes are such a beautiful thing to write about. But it's very unique to see hair in anyway. I love how you say your eyes are vulnerable. Like they are still afraid of something. And you wrote that you are starting to show your love for her. Okay I love how you describe her eyes as soft. She is a kind person and seems to understand what is hidden inside. What you say is she loves you no matter what is hidden. That is really true love.

    Ending- The ending is very touching iand warms my heart to the core. She tries to help you by soothing you and loving you with words she says. If it is true love you will always be there no matter what happens. I love the hair too again. You let your hair down to show who you really are maybe? Haha. Anyways. The whole poem is great as it shows how much one person can really change your life for the better. It also shows how much love one person can give if you let them in. Xx

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